Hello everyone!
I have written a poem like the one we read in class that day. Please can you tell me what you think of it!
Paint Me Like I am
By Shannon
Inspired by Delia Garcia
Why don’t you paint me
Like I am?
Paint me courageous,
Bravely, walking through the jungle.
Paint me with a smile on my face.
Paint me with a safari hat
And ready to explore.
Paint me tall trees, rivers, and bushes.
Paint me with Tigers, Lions, Monkeys, and Crocodiles.
Paint me somewhere wonderful.
Somewhere where the sun smiles and
The moon sings you to sleep.
With hummingbirds floating,
Around the deep blue sky.
Paint me without shyness.
Paint me without hatred.
Paint me without depression.
Paint me so I will never frown.
Can you see the face telling you to paint me courageous?
Paint me with happiness, but most of all
Paint me free.
copyright 2008, by Australia 202.
Hoped you liked it!
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6 comments:
Very nice painted poem! I have a poem to...
Roses are red violets are blue how many times can I say this poem to you?!
Like it?!
well good job Shannon!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hi Shannon,
I enjoyed your poem. Great idea. Done very well. The first two stanzas are the best ones by far. So good that you might not need the rest. You give the reader all of the clues they need in stanzas 1 and 2.
best lines:
"Why don't you paint me like I am"
"paint me courageous"
"somewhere the sun smiles"
I might end the poem with:
"around the deep blue sky"
Hi Shannon,
I enjoyed your poem. Great idea. Done very well. The first two stanzas are the best ones by far. So good that you might not need the rest. You give the reader all of the clues they need in stanzas 1 and 2.
Thanks. Haven't been able to get back online. I have been very busy with Acting camps and tennis.
Thanks for the suggestions.
Hope everyone's enjoying there summer!
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